The grateful soul
fights with the greedy ego.
Depending on who wins,
either both survive
or both die.
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When I was reading this 11 days after I first had posted it in this blog,
I felt it was a bit strong, a bit opiniated.
Perhaps it would be better and a bit softer:
The grateful soul and the greedy ego
Sometimes they fight
If the first one wins, peace of mind is mine
If the second one wins, often I may feel full
but rarely satisfied.
fights with the greedy ego.
Depending on who wins,
either both survive
or both die.
-----------------------------------------------------------------------------------
When I was reading this 11 days after I first had posted it in this blog,
I felt it was a bit strong, a bit opiniated.
Perhaps it would be better and a bit softer:
The grateful soul and the greedy ego
Sometimes they fight
If the first one wins, peace of mind is mine
If the second one wins, often I may feel full
but rarely satisfied.
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